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Um, that is a paragraph, genius. Take an English Composition course and maybe you'll figure it out.Can you get banned for not using paragraphs?
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Um, that is a paragraph, genius. Take an English Composition course and maybe you'll figure it out.Can you get banned for not using paragraphs?
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Um, that is a paragraph, genius.
Paragraph breaks are good. Paragraph breaks work.
Details in Paragraphs
The short paragraph in this lesson is a fairly complete paragraph, but it lacks details. Whenever possible, you should include enough details in your paragraphs to help your reader understand exactly what you are writing about. In the paragraph about Wheaton, three natural landmarks are mentioned, but we do not know very much about them. For example, we could add a sentence or two about Wheaton river concerning HOW wide it is or WHY it is beautiful. Consider this revision (and note the additional details in bold):
My hometown is famous for several amazing natural features. First, it is noted for the Wheaton River, which is very wide and beautiful. On either side of this river, which is 175 feet wide, are many willow trees which have long branches that can move gracefully in the wind. In autumn the leaves of these trees fall and cover the riverbanks like golden snow. Also, on the other side of the town is Wheaton Hill, which is unusual because it is very steep. Even though it is steep, climbing this hill is not dangerous, because there are some firm rocks along the sides that can be used as stairs. There are no trees around this hill, so it stands clearly against the sky and can be seen from many miles away. The third amazing feature is the Big Old Tree. This tree stands two hundred feet tall and is probably about six hundred years old. These three landmarks are truly amazing and make my hometown a famous place.
If we wished, we could also add more details to the paragraph to describe the third natural feature of the area, the Big Old Tree.
Why are details important? Consider the example of the hamburger, mentioned above.* If the hamburger buns are the topic and concluding sentences, then the meat, the cheese, the lettuce, and so on are the supporting details. Without the food between the hamburger buns, your hamburger would not be very delicious! Similarly, without supporting details, your paragraph would not be very interesting.
A Note on Formality. In addition to having a particular kind of structure, academic paragraphs (and multi-paragraph essays, which will be topic of another lesson) are different from "ordinary writing" (such as letter writing) in that certain kinds of expressions are not allowed. For example, in formal essays, you should not use contractions such as don't or aren't. Instead, you should write out the words in full, for example, do not and are not.
Also, in formal essays you should avoid the first and second person. That is, do not use the pronouns I or you. The pronouns we and us are sometimes used in formal essays in some major fields, but in general you should not use these unless you are certain that they are customary in your field and/or your professor allows them. It is safer simply to use the third person.
http://lrs.ed.uiuc.edu/students/fwalters/para.html
If you want people to bother reading your posts that are that long, break them up.
Your post about details in paragraphs makes no sense.
I'd explain further but it would appear to be a waste of time. But what would be acceptable, 10 separate sentences?
.I'd explain further but it would appear to be a waste of time. But what would be acceptable, 10 separate sentences?
I, like others, have been on that board for a long, long time. Even though it says Jan. 2006, I was on that board about 2000. Once upon a time, you can have arguments and not get in trouble. It was never OK to curse, which I don't have a problem with but the big problem is that SEZ and Cats have their friends who get away with murder. In fact, it was me responding to one of their friends that got me banned this week. She insulted me and all I replied was, "And you can take a one way trip to Hades." I was banned for that. No lie. Then I sent a "contact us" email requesting clarification as to why I was banned and asked how they could be so thin skinned.
Instead of an answer, I got banned another week which is funny considering their sanctions are progressive and I know a "insulting email" isn't worthy of 7 points(their level for banning).
Thing is, they've been gunning for me for a while because I dare voice my displeasure about the team quite often and make no bones about calling kool aid drinking fans that.
Once my ban is up, I'm going to let loose a thread that probably gets me permanently banned. Mind you, I don't use foul language or skirt buffers unless it's a stupid word that's banned, like "fork", which is banned on their site. I'm going to tell them exactly how I feel how the mods run the board. Draconian doesn't begin to describe it.
Um, that is a paragraph, genius. Take an English Composition course and maybe you'll figure it out.
I, like others, have been on that board for a long, long time. Even though it says Jan. 2006, I was on that board about 2000. Once upon a time, you can have arguments and not get in trouble. It was never OK to curse, which I don't have a problem with but the big problem is that SEZ and Cats have their friends who get away with murder. In fact, it was me responding to one of their friends that got me banned this week. She insulted me and all I replied was, "And you can take a one way trip to Hades." I was banned for that. No lie. Then I sent a "contact us" email requesting clarification as to why I was banned and asked how they could be so thin skinned. Instead of an answer, I got banned another week which is funny considering their sanctions are progressive and I know a "insulting email" isn't worthy of 7 points(their level for banning). Thing is, they've been gunning for me for a while because I dare voice my displeasure about the team quite often and make no bones about calling kool aid drinking fans that. Once my ban is up, I'm going to let loose a thread that probably gets me permanently banned. Mind you, I don't use foul language or skirt buffers unless it's a stupid word that's banned, like "fork", which is banned on their site. I'm going to tell them exactly how I feel how the mods run the board. Draconian doesn't begin to describe it.
I did not say hell. I said Hades. There is a difference. And I said so in my OP in this thread. However, I was responding to an insult thrown my way so I guess it's OK if I'm the insultee. Hell, 2 of my points were from 2008 when I dared call someone a noob. You know, as in noobie as in someone who just became a part of the board and another for supposedly skirting the word filter because I thought it was ridiculous that the word fork, as in 'stick a fork in 'em, they're done' is a banned word. I wish I was making that up.Just to let you know the Mods did not ban you it was the site admin's who did. By you getting a point here a point there it adds up and SEZ is the head admin. They dont ban just to ban. I read some of your posts and by telling another poster to go to hell that got you got 1 point, those points add up. By the way you would get that (points) here also.
Dont try to make yourself all innocent and all. You sow what you reep my friend.
I did not say hell. I said Hades. There is a difference. And I said so in my OP in this thread. However, I was responding to an insult thrown my way so I guess it's OK if I'm the insultee. Hell, 2 of my points were from 2008 when I dared call someone a noob. You know, as in noobie as in someone who just became a part of the board and another for supposedly skirting the word filter because I thought it was ridiculous that the word fork, as in 'stick a fork in 'em, they're done' is a banned word. I wish I was making that up.
I'm not claiming any total innocence here, I'm just saying that they selectively enforce the rules over there and no one can tell me different.
(Is this sentence structure better?)
Oh, I'm not saying I can be a knucklehead but my point is that they selectively enforce the rules. But, I'm having a bad week so maybe I was a bit more of a knucklehead as usual.Understand what you are saying. I am just saying its not the Mods who did this.
Again...
Can we move on now?
Fork is a banned word? Weird.I did not say hell. I said Hades. There is a difference. And I said so in my OP in this thread. However, I was responding to an insult thrown my way so I guess it's OK if I'm the insultee. Hell, 2 of my points were from 2008 when I dared call someone a noob. You know, as in noobie as in someone who just became a part of the board and another for supposedly skirting the word filter because I thought it was ridiculous that the word fork, as in 'stick a fork in 'em, they're done' is a banned word. I wish I was making that up.
I'm not claiming any total innocence here, I'm just saying that they selectively enforce the rules over there and no one can tell me different.
(Is this sentence structure better?)
As long as we're focusing on language structure: You actually reap what you sow. The sowing is the planting, the reaping is the harvest.You sow what you reep my friend.
You sow what you reep my friend.
As long as we're focusing on language structure: You actually reap what you sow. The sowing is the planting, the reaping is the harvest.
Fork is a banned word? Weird.
As long as we're focusing on language structure: You actually reap what you sow. The sowing is the planting, the reaping is the harvest.
Dont care. Thats why there are grocery store! No work needed. LOL
That is weird.Yes it is and it was explained to me that it's too close to the dreaded 'F' word. You think that's bad, on the official Phillies/MLB message boards, there are innocuous words like strike, struck, stuck, and the like that are banned. I mean, strike and struck are banned words in a baseball forum?
That is weird.
Yes it is and it was explained to me that it's too close to the dreaded 'F' word. You think that's bad, on the official Phillies/MLB message boards, there are innocuous words like strike, struck, stuck, and the like that are banned. I mean, strike and struck are banned words in a baseball forum?
Post of the year!As long as we're focusing on language structure: You actually reap what you sow. The sowing is the planting, the reaping is the harvest.
Okay, now I wonder if you aren't just trying to give BIM a flickin' heart attack.
JTS
